Wildspark

This was really good. I liked the way that you used similes like "I never felt like I could connect with anyone, like there was a glass that was always ...

Wow, that ending was pretty surprising. The story was well written and I liked it a lot. Was the woman wearing gloves? Because she touched his ring and the police ...

There were a few problems with the story. You kept on switching back and forth between present and past tense. You should decide which one you want to use and ...

I liked this a lot. It's so sick and creepy. There were a couple of mistakes in it, like this part: "so sixteen year old Rebecca Young new exactly". You ...

There were a lot of great things about the story and some not so great things. The first sentence was sentence was too long and you should probably break it ...