WaitingForLife

Thanks for the review! I am also a fervent English student, though in my own, often very lazy, way, and love experimenting with all kinds of little quirks of writing. ...

But Wake-Up Slap is a Pokemon move, haha :P

Arright, good point. This is the kind of stuff I have trouble seeing objectively (the classic oh-but-it-was-so-clear-in-my-head -syndrome), and I thank you for pointing it out. Added this into the ...

Heya, thanks for at least attempting to read it! :D Err, Sunday isn't actually a dog; the captain is only using "dog" and "cur" as insults. Hmm, and I'm not ...

Haha, yeah, that makes a lot more sense. :D

Thanks for a class review. :) The sentence's idea is that his footsteps, usually near-silent and now completely muffled by the hood, are silent to him, and the only way ...

Lol wow, I forgot to change that after realizing where I'd heard the name before xD Dammit. Well don't I look like a big doofus now. Glad I could help ...

Howdy hey, and thank you. :)

Thanks for the review! :) Thoughts can be written like this as well, the debate between thoughts in quotation marks or not is a very ambiguous one and can be ...

Thanks. :) I see what you mean by informal, working on getting my text sound natural again. ^^

Thanks! Yeah, the lack of action was intentional; used this as an exercise in descriptive writing. ^^ Oh, and oops, thanks for pointing the 'paid' out!

only one period at the end*

The 'o' was a choice of visual aesthetics, as "o" looked too attention-catching in the stanza. I understand the grammatical issue, but it looked wrong to me in this instance. ...

Hmm, what's with the aggressive approach? I value negative criticism, but there's no need to attack the work. 1) The whole poem was actually just one sentence, with all the ...

Haha, thanks! :)