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^^^ Ditto Daisy about the needle. I like the concept. Its quite original, and keeps this from being average. The line 'And did something very rare' seems really forced. Maybe ...

One question: who is Nessy? One statement: generally when a piece requires an explanation at the bottom, there's something missing from the actual writing. One comment: having the line "Time ...

Thanks guys! I really appreciate your comments I am really sorry if i sounded rude it's just that I'm not always in the best of a mood especially this year ...

As i lay awake at night, I think about the day that just went by, Wondering if I could have changed anything to make it better. - you need another ...

This was basically meant to be short and to the point.

well I'm sorry but if you had read the whole thing then you would have realized that it wasn't really a poem i just thought that that was the closest ...

lol it sounds like it's suppose to be in a fairy tale book...if thats what you were looking for its pretty good....but if you were looking for sumthing else....YOU FAIL ...

pretty nice but yeah i think the words are a bit plain....and if YOU broke up with him why will you still love him and wait for him?? :?

well i got some views....BUT DO ANY OF YOU THINK YOU COULD REPLY TELLING ME WHAT YOU THINK AND GIVING ME ANY ADVICE???!! OH yeah i almost forgot see this ...