VivelaMusique

Thanks for the review! Out of curiosity did you mark those words because they're big? Or because of how they were used?

Snoink: Thanks for reading! But to reply to your comments: 1. I capitalized the last word of every line because I was trying to have the last word work as ...

Thanks guys. I completely forgot this existed, it was posted almost two years ago I think. Wow. Thanks for the comments anyways. -Maggie

Username: Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed! Fratelli: Thank you, as well. I always have problems with the passive voice in narrative scenes...thank you for pointing it out for me! Anywho, ...

Okay, so I took what you all mentioned into account and I changed somethings...though I kept others. Hopefully this is better. I see trees of green, red roses too I ...

Thank you both for your input, I'll think about going back and adding more detail and a more thorough explanation. Thanks again!

Hello again! This has definitely gotten better! But there's still somethings to fix... “The Police believe John Aston was killed by one of his ex-employees. The layoff Aston Automobiles just ...

JHall, Oooh, hahaha. I guess that's probably why I didn't understand it... :) I enjoyed reading your stuff. I keep an eye out for anything new you post. -Maggie

Hey again! I found a couple little issues in the revisions. He wasn't going anywhere in particular, he just decided to go for a walk out of boredom. This seems ...

GreatEscape: Maybe you could describe his reasons as impulsive. For example in the beginning sentence, when he decides to go into the cafe, maybe you could say that it was ...

Sure! All you need to do is press enter/return in between paragraphs (or whatever) just so that there is one line blank in between. :) -Maggie

Sweeney_Todd : Thanks, I tried to keep them in character... :) Jadeite : Merci :D x-tears-x : Hahaha, I think that's the best review so far. ;) I love being ...

Tyler: Thanks!! :) Nightfall: Thank you, as well. The ending was oh, so clever (which you already know) :wink:

Kenpachi Masamune: Though Sirius doesn't seem to be the type to drink wine, he has the look of being more for meat and red wine if anything. I'm a little ...

GryphonFledgling: Ohh, what's your challenge? Have you been posting any of it here? I'm confused as to why Curiosity wanted to kill the cat in the first place. Was he ...