VioletSunrise

Wow! This was amazing. I was interested at the first sentence. I wonder what's making Yazra be like this... Not a lot to criticize here. Great work :] I'm excited ...

Haha, I know exactly how you feel. This was really good, and really got me thinking. Awesome job!

Hey thanks! After re-reading it, I can see what you mean by "When will Light come" getting old. I will definetely revise that. Thanks a bunch! :)

I really could feel your emotions in this poem. It was really deep, and it spoke to me. I think all the errors are already pointed out; I couldn't find ...

This was a very good beginning. I found the story easy to follow, but hard to read. Try spacing out the lines. Couldn't find much else wrong with this, you ...