ViaLia

This chapter is amazing, just like the first one! I had a bit of criticism, though. You could have been a bit more description and filler details up to the ...

This is a very good little story, and I am very impressed with your level of vocabulary! It brought me away from reality during the time I was reading it, ...

Wow. This story had many changes. I'm surprised that nobody mentioned this, but it sounds like you used names that were popular during the time period you were using! I ...