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I'll go ahead and restate: more punctuation. As Clau said, teenagers are a very prominent subject here at the YWS. However, I haven't really seen one that was written from ...

I liked it. People need to realize that poems aren't perfect by the time you realize that there's nothing more you can do with it. I actually read he whole ...

How do you know this is a poem to God and not the author's actual father? I would not go making assumptions without knowing for sure. Your interpretation may be ...

..are you sure this is even supposed to be a poem or are you just introducing yourself to the site? The title, subject matter and lack of poetic elements here ...

I don't either, sorry. This is morbid--although there is nothing that says you can't write morbid poetry. But...this is really not appealing, morbid or not. It's just bland, boring, and ...

I would have to say that this is not poetry. It doesn't have any poetic elements at all. It's a nice thought. That's just swell. But...it's not poetry. This is ...

I also did not understand this poem, and by the end almost had to force myself to complete it. As previously mentioned, the stanza are too short and too few. ...

This is an accurate description of a hurricane. But, it's braf. You are saying all these things that happen in a hurricane, but you aren't showing us how they happen. ...

On the contrary, I thought the flow was too... flowy ? All the lines seem to have the same about of syllables in them, which I think is great for ...

Actually, this is not horrible! I like the style...it's a lot more non-meloncholy than most pieces we tend to find here on the YWS, even though it is talking about ...

I would say this isn't bad , persay. It just isn't poetry. It's really just a whole bunch of questions thrown in a row. There aren't any poetic elements involved ...

It's not bad. But...of course I have a few things to say. First, the beginning is very stringy. Really...like string cheese, just kind of falling apart. It starts to get ...

Loved it; especially the allusions. Thank you for not jumping around with your allusions and just sticking with Bible references....people drive me nuts when they flop between four different things ...

It's a nice thought, really, but it needs to be carried out--there is no ending, it just kind of stops. I would reconsider your linebreaks here...they are often awkward. The ...

You always impress me with your writing. I rarely have anything to say to better them. You have a lot of talent. You should consider mentoring. Really. Keep it up. ...