Ventomology

Heh... I actually started this one to work on a problem I ran in to with my first piece of not adding enough detail! Looks like there's still a lot ...

Thank YOU! This is definitely a piece I plan on finishing.

Yeah, some of those wordings are awkward, but I'll fix them. Thanks for reviewing me!

Ah, okay. But I'd try posting sections of about 1000-1500 words. That's the length I use, it has been successful for me.

I'm willing to bet that most of the people on YWS don't use text language all that often-including me! But I think you did a good job anyway. (Certainly better ...

Heh, well... The people on the airship aren't all that important to the story so I sort of ignored them. Whoops. Thanks for catching all of that!

Um... I think the whole "crashed airship" is my cliff-hanger... Maybe it just wasn't suspenseful enough? What do you think I would do to make that a bit more dramatic? ...

Thanks for reading! (I only hope I can keep this up...)

Thanks so much for all your reviews and support while I worked on this! There is still a lot for me to do, and after I have my parents and ...

Well, if you remember, the mission was to keep the quantum device from doing anything to disrupt the universe. (I suppose I did a bad job explaining that... I'll probably ...

Oh... Um... Lots of mistakes here, I see! The bit about not killing them is weird depending on how you look at it. I always figured it would be easier ...

We actually have the awkward doors mentioned earlier, but still whoops on all the grammatical errors. And I suppose I should have someone leave during that last scene, hm? Again, ...

Whoops, I probably need something from Theo or Noel's perspective so that it's clear that they already have plans...

Oh... Yeah that thinking bit needs some work. Thanks for catching it!

Whoops! I guess Theo's internet telepathy requires explanation. Just asking, but do you think it would be smart to put it in the previous chapter?