Ventomology

Thanks so much! I'm glad to know people actually think this is funny.

Hey! Thanks a ton for giving this piece a shot! It's part of a contest known as the LMS (for Last Man Standing), so I have no doubt you'll be ...

Hmm... I always thought of magenta as a shade of pink, like not all pinks are magenta, but all magentas are pink? And you are definitely right about the cheese ...

I think teenagers with cars tend to really like their cars... a number of my classmates actually do the same thing as Vera. It's sad, isn't it? Thanks as always!

I think that thing with Brooke may be the most embarrassing case of discontinuity I have ever written... Thanks for catching it! Also, I guess I will have to explain ...

Thanks for the review! Unfortunately I can't see Martin and Drake speaking in quite the manner you suggest, but you are probably right that the conversation is cliched. I'll have ...

Ahh, you're probably right about that last point. I think I've had the problem a number of times in the past too; it's a hard one to catch! I'll try ...

Thanks!

Honestly, this whole book is cheesy, and I'm just glad to be done with it so I can work on other things. There are definitely things to fix, and I'll ...

Thanks!

Ahh, yeah. I planned on addressing the issue of Toby's name, but I decided not to, since it's fairly obvious from part 1.01. He actually has a different given name ...

Ahh, Martin's a vampire. And you're definitely right about the cops. I suppose I just don't have much experience with them (which is probably a good thing except I don't ...

I suppose you wouldn't know, since you just got here, but the whole story is a little cheesy when it comes to the mystery. I have fixed that little wording ...

I can see how the wording there might be confusing. I supposed I never looked at the context that way. Thanks for pointing out that little detail!

Ahh... so there are still some awkward sentences in here. I'll fix them right away! As for the action, thanks for the kudos! I don't write a ton of long ...