Ventomology

Ahh, you're probably right about that last point. I think I've had the problem a number of times in the past too; it's a hard one to catch! I'll try ...

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Honestly, this whole book is cheesy, and I'm just glad to be done with it so I can work on other things. There are definitely things to fix, and I'll ...

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Ahh, yeah. I planned on addressing the issue of Toby's name, but I decided not to, since it's fairly obvious from part 1.01. He actually has a different given name ...

Ahh, Martin's a vampire. And you're definitely right about the cops. I suppose I just don't have much experience with them (which is probably a good thing except I don't ...

I suppose you wouldn't know, since you just got here, but the whole story is a little cheesy when it comes to the mystery. I have fixed that little wording ...

I can see how the wording there might be confusing. I supposed I never looked at the context that way. Thanks for pointing out that little detail!

Ahh... so there are still some awkward sentences in here. I'll fix them right away! As for the action, thanks for the kudos! I don't write a ton of long ...

I got her in the previous chapter, yes, which was 1.01. This is a rather confusing way of numbering chapters, but I committed to it already, and there's no going ...

I actually try to avoid concluding sentences that are both dramatized and generalized. They make me feel cheesy. I will, however, put a bit more effort into the character descriptions. ...

As of June 26, this chapter has been edited to fit with the rest of the coming chapter.

You may already be there, but please be aware that I am rewriting 3.21 currently, because I was unsatisfied with how it fit into the storyline. It's still up for ...

"Ponderous" means heavy. It's an SAT word, which is probably why you suspected it wasn't real (those SAT words sound terribly silly, and I'm not sure who even uses them). ...

I think a number of these either have precedents or context already set up in earlier chapters. Sorry it's not all that clear! Thanks for the review, and happy review ...