Ventomology

...Well, I try to make sure filler-ish details become plot relevant, but sometimes with LMS I get sidetracked. We'll see if what I have in mind for the shielding gets ...

Me and my bogged-down action. I keep trying to fix that, but I don't seem to be doing a very good job. Thanks a bunch!

Ahh... yeah... I may be getting lazy with the show/tell thing. I need to redouble my efforts. Thanks so much!

Err... I'm not a hundred percent sure what you're telling me here? Did I bog down the action too much? Because that's definitely a thing I have to work on. ...

Yeah... my action scenes in general need some work. And I hadn't thought of the reciprocal emotions thing. That's something for me to keep in mind as well. Thanks for ...

This actually is a shorter chapter than what I have been putting out, so that would explain why you felt it was short. But I am glad you enjoyed it! ...

...I think I am going to have to play around with the interlude formatting again... The way this is formatted does lend itself to causing confusion on the time flow. ...

Man...when I edited this I must have been totally out of it. Now that you point it out, this chapter is probably the biggest info dump I've ever written. If ...

Ahh... that is a good point. I'll have to keep all the possible reactions in mind when I come back to this guy. (Also how did I get two of ...

It certainly is later. Sorry I'm still experimenting with how I want to format the little interludes.

I love that moment when someone points out something totally obvious that completely slipped my mind. I have brought dishonor upon my family. And I'm glad you like Mouthbot! I ...

Don't worry too much and just focus on getting better! Thanks for taking to time to read all of this.

I have no idea what I was doing that week... but it is really confusing, and I will have to fix that someday... And also I can't read, because someone ...

You are so right about the wheelchair thing. I can't believe I didn't think about that... ah, that's embarrassing. I'll have to keep that in mind when he shows up ...

Hey thanks for giving this a read! I'll look over the two thought-intrusions again to see what I can do.