Ventomology

Heya! Bug here to review. And before I forget, welcome to YWS! So first things first: Grammar! (Sorry, but I always do this.) Only one thing, since Cricket already addressed ...

Whoa! This was pretty amazing! Since inspirus covered some of the grammar stuff already... I guess I'll just say that the work could use more diversity in sentence length. You ...

Heya! Buggie here to review! So first things first: Please proofread before posting. There are a lot of typos and verb-tense mix-ups and missing commas. Also, reading things aloud never ...

I kind of wanted a more cliff-hanger-ish ending, but hey, what you did works too! Anyway... I'm back! Let's see, I didn't find any obvious grammar mistakes, so I'll skip ...

Heya! Welcome to YWS! So... I apologize if I come off as harsh, and let's get this party started, shall we? First off, I didn't find any mistakes in the ...

Hey! I'm back! So, I think your chapters are still too short. If they don't string together the way you want them too, then try adding *** to separate the ...

Hello there! Remember me? I'm from the DreamLand SB. Whatever, onto the review! So first: I didn't really see any huge grammatical errors. There was one typo where you just ...

Ooh! Heya, Ladcat! Remember me? I am so so so excited to read this. At first, I was sort of hesitant because it's from the same universe as the SB, ...

I'm confused! Why does Alec call Zander 'Luke' at the end of the chapter? You may want to fix that if it wasn't intentional. Anyway, I know it's late, but ...

Hello there! Figured I'd get a move on before review day starts. So, grammar is lacking here. It's nothing ridiculous like verb tense mix-ups, but your use of semicolons is ...

Hello there! I haven't read the rest of the story (I probably just missed it) but I suppose it can't hurt, no? So, I didn't find any grammatical errors, so ...

Heya! I'm back! So... I like the era you picked. And the zeppelins! I love zeppelins. Anyways, onto the nitpicking: As for grammar, I noticed a few run-ons and missing ...

Heya! Sorry it took me so long to get to this one. Let's cut to the chase: Grammar: Mostly perfect. I found a few random verb-tense-mix-ups, but that's it. Technique: ...

Hello there! I know it's belated, but welcome to YWS! Now then, it would be wise to have the three chapters 1.1-1.3 posted all together, all as one prologue or ...

Hooray! We get to read the next chapter! Anyways, I'm back for another review. Great job, by the way. So, grammar-wise, just a few typos and awkwardly worded dependent clauses. ...