Ventomology

Yo! First off, welcome to YWS! I look forward to seeing you around, and definitely where you end up taking this piece. It's fabulous! However, before I start gushing, let's ...

Yo! Sorry I haven't reviewed this part. I don't know why I never saw it. Anyways, some general comments: There are a few typos, like maybe five? They are mostly ...

Yo! I noticed that quite a few of this story's chapters are still in the Green Room. That's too bad; it seems quite intriguing. Anyhow, I have three nitpicks for ...

Heya! First off, allow me to welcome you to YWS. I hope you like it here! Now then, let's get this review started. I really like this idea, and I ...

Yo! Buggie here for a review. Now then, let's cut to the chase! (Just as a precaution, I'm rather blunt.) Since there are actually a lot of sentences that are ...

Goodness, Chicago huh? I feel like you mentioned it during a chat or something. Well, onto the review! Before I begin, I have two nitpicks for you. I came here ...

Yo! So, this seems like a pretty interesting piece. If I find time, I'll try to come back to it. Since I didn't see much that needed nit-picking, I'll just ...

Yo! Hey sorry I haven't been reviewing your chapters lately. But I've caught up, so let's do this! Nitpicks first: 4th paragraph: I don't think I'd use 'dark', as you ...

I'm back! I only have one general comment for you (the rest are repeats of last time), and it's that you really like avoiding 'says'. Seriously, whatever your teachers may ...

Hello there! I hope you don't mind that I haven't read the other parts, but I'm liking how this bit played out, so I'll try to read them. Anyways, since ...

Hello there! Sorry I didn't read the first part, but I'll see if I can get to it some time. Now then, I hate to tell people this, but you ...

Uh... I have no idea what happened there, but it's gotta be pretty serious. Anyways, since I want to save the overall comments for the end, I'll go straight to ...

Yo! It's review time! Now then, I am sorry to say that I have not read your previous chapters, but hopefully I'll get to them soon--This is pretty interesting. Before ...

In answer to your question, I would give you the elephant in the room, because no one is supposed to mention it. (That was the worst joke I've ever told.) ...

Since I have no idea what colleges like and don't like (too young for that!), I can't help you with any of those questions, but I can help review grammar! ...