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Re: A new home, A new Love ( ch 4 p2)
Dude, I love this story. Please write more soon. Lol. :) It's very suspenseful and keeps you on the edge of your seat. Probably the only useful thing I can ...
Tue Feb 23, 2010 3:13 am -
Re: Suicide, The Note.
It was good. Definitely different. I liked it. Maybe make it a little longer? It was really short. You might could try explaining it a little bit. Otherwise it was ...
Sun Feb 21, 2010 5:56 am -
Re: The Slick Floor Chapter 7
Okay. I really like this story. It's got an edge of suspense to it. I think that that is what keeps most people reading is that they have to know ...
Sun Feb 07, 2010 4:46 am -
Re: Two Souls - Chapter 1
It was really good and detailed. However, there were a few grammar mistakes...unless you put them in there intentionally. Lol. Shew? I think show or showed? Usualed to? Maybe used ...
Sat Feb 06, 2010 9:36 pm -
Re: The Slick Floor chapter 4
I loved it. It was great. Still confusing the forms of there again. Just be kinda careful with that. Other than that, I thought it was great. :) I can't ...
Mon Feb 01, 2010 9:37 pm -
Re: The Slick Floor- Prologue/ Chapter 1
Wow. I loved this story. It was absolutely amazing. :) As soon as I'm done here I'm going to go read the next part. There were a few grammar errors. ...
Mon Feb 01, 2010 9:25 pm -
Re: A new home, A new Love ( ch 1)
Hey! Vanilla here. I really like your story. I really want to read more. :) There were a few grammar errors. I noticed that you were using the wrong forms ...
Mon Feb 01, 2010 9:10 pm -
Re: Small Steps
Hi. VanillaTwilight here. I just gotta say that I loved this piece. It demonstrates perfectly what so many girls go through. I really didn't find any grammar errors. I loved ...
Mon Feb 01, 2010 8:02 pm -
Re: Blue Rose
Okay. Personally I thought it was good. A little short, but good. However, I definitely reccommend proof reading. There were a few instances where your subject didn't agree with your ...
Mon Feb 01, 2010 7:52 pm -
Re: Say
Hey, JD. I just want to say first that i love this story, and the way you incorporated the John Mayer song is really awesome. It had a good story ...
Mon Feb 01, 2010 6:51 pm -
Re: As You Like It (Title subject to change)
Ah! I want to read more. :) It was really good. I think this has already been said, but it definitely flows smoothly. I really couldn't see any problems with ...
Mon Feb 01, 2010 6:57 am -
Re: To Touch (1)
Hi. Okay. It was a really good story, really touching. But it got kinda confusing. I think you switched points of view a couple times. Other than that I didn't ...
Fri Jan 29, 2010 9:09 am -
Re: A Love Story
Hey. I just want to start off by saying that I really liked this piece. It was really sweet. However, you might want to watch verb tenses. I noticed you ...
Fri Jan 29, 2010 9:04 am -
Re: Diary of Kidnapping...Chapter 2
Ok. This is kind of a review of Chapter 1 and Chapter 2 combined. I love them both. They are both really fast paced and well thought out. In the ...
Mon Jan 25, 2010 12:53 am -
Re: Makng it (For Love and Music #1)
Ok. This is my first review ever. So, here it goes. First, I really like the piece. It's really well thought out. I hope to see a second part out ...
Mon Jan 25, 2010 12:38 am