Valteria

Hi. Let's see. I am not going to discuss grammatical errors. Just know that you have a lot of missing words and awkward sentences and phrases here and there. My ...

Good job. I like everything: the descriptions, the characters, the atmosphere of the story. I strongly recommend you change the ending, though. Maybe instead of saying that Adam killed someone, ...

I have to be honest with you. I didn't read past the first sentence of the fifth paragraph because I was bored out of my head.You simply bragged and listed ...

This piece was nice and cute, although there was not a single element in it that I can honestly say I have not read elsewhere. You are a good writer, ...

Amen to Viviel's review. This is, by far, the best work I have read on this site. Not only is your idea original, but it is also well-written. I am ...

Interesting. :D To start with, I believe that this story has some potential. You should continue on to writing Chapter 2. The title is strong. It leaves me in suspense ...

I recently reviewed a story, believing it to be the best thing I've read on this site so far, but you just topped the list. The whole idea of being ...

*wiping tears* Wow! You are probably the best writer I've reviewed on this site so far. Your story had deep emotion and left me really caring about Madelyn and John's ...

This story is really sad, but I still enjoyed it. Some parts were unnecessary and others didn't make sense, though. You really should get rid of this sentence: I'm going ...

I can totally relate to this if you're this poem is about a potential story character. Sometimes I feel like my characters are real people and I actually like them ...

This wasn't an actual story. It seemed more like a note that someone would write to his/her ex than a piece that could get published. You have potential definitely. I ...

Scary, yes, but overall, I thought this was poorly written. It was depressing yet altogether dumb at the same time. So you didn't give the readers enough background on David ...

This is a lovely poem. I like the rhyme scheme. Your grandmother must have been an amazing woman because this poem is truly is both happy and sad simultaneously. Happy ...

Well........... I am going to make the assumption that this piece is meant to be ambiguous. Right? Anyhow, it was quite an enjoyable read. Let me guess. He is not ...

Good.............................but not great. What this is missing is less tell and more show. Right now, the older brother seems like a spoiled brat. I'm not understanding him. There's no good ...