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  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Realm of Reflection

    Hi angels~ I think this idea is really interesting! The lake part reminds me of the part in The Magician's Nephew (C.S. Lewis) where the main character found himself in ...

    Jul 31, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Barn

    Hi amatuli~ I'm Unsquishable~ There are a few questions I'd like to ask as well as a few suggestions I'd like to give, if that's okay with you. The old ...

    Jul 31, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: ShadowDance: Chapter One

    Hi Silversun! First of all, I have a few questions that I'd like to ask pertaining this chapter. It would be a safe house in the midst of enemies, but ...

    Jul 25, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Writers Block- Prologue

    Sare, here is the review!! This'll just be short since Kara already got most of the problems~ Rising, she grabbed her note book and trotted upstairs. Suddenly, inspiration struck. Setting ...

    Jul 18, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Words Cut Thin

    Hi Selene~ This seems like an interesting story. I'd love to read more of it. So anyway, here are some of the errors I found: I jumped, but he seemed ...

    Jul 18, 2009
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: The Cobbled Streets of London.

    Hi! Here's the review! Today had to be the best day of my life -EVER! This doesn't sound like something a working man would say. Maybe you should rephrase it. ...

    Jul 8, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Kingdom of Gold {chapter 1}

    Hi angels symphony! Firstly, I just want to say that this piece is nicely written. I felt that your characters weren't flat at all... the chapter didn't reveal too much ...

    Jul 5, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Gatekeeper

    Hi Mira! Here's the review I promised you! Tears ran down my cheeks. I sobbed furiously, trying to wipe away the liquid running down my face. My best friend, Teresa, ...

    Jul 4, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: A Bloody Un-Fairytale.1

    Hi! Firstly, I would have to say that I think this chapter is full of could-be useless information. I think you should concentrate more on the important things. As she ...

    Jul 3, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Blasphemy

    Hello Fort! I'll just skip immediately to what I think about your piece since Moo has written most of the errors I found in your work. I like this piece, ...

    Jun 26, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Untitled Prologue :)

    Hallo Moo! Here's the feedback on your prologue: Avynn seemed even more alive in its last hours. The storm pulsed around the lone figure hunched over the balcony, lightning illuminating ...

    Jun 26, 2009


My tongue must tell the anger of my heart, or else my heart, concealing it, will break...
— Katherine, The Taming of the Shrew