UncleJimmy

The unpredictability of being a bus driver :) Great writing.

Perfectly correct!! I've tried to capture fear in a couple of my unfinished stories, and failed miserably.

Great writing!!! Other than a few spelling errors, and some punctuation problems, it's a great story. Keep it up.

Wow!!! You've got some deep thoughts there. Beyond a few misspellings, it is a great story.

This does sound like a fable, and reminds me of a Native American origin story. I like the fact that there are no spelling mistakes. Same here!! Great storyline.

Interesting story. But, I have a question. Why would they be racing, simply because they are the only two people left in the world?

Farts, the curse of romance. Great writing!!!

The only thing I can think of is that her father hated Henry.

Great!!! A few spelling errors, but the characterization? Wow! what a treat.

I trimmed it up, thanks to your help.

Okay, I see what you mean. Thanks.

I've never read Ranger's Apprentice series, but your characterization is good, and you described the background in fair detail without boring the reader. Good work I'd say.