Twitch111

I liked it. :D The only objection that I have is that in the first couple paragraphs you used Billy too often. I might replace it every once in a ...

I thought it was great even though you have some typos.Like you forgot to capitalize "Wick" several times and forgot to put the "o" in on. Like in this sentence ...

Wow, it sounds really good so far. You have several grammer and spelling mistakes, but other than that it is great. I find it easier to write the story and ...

I really liked. Though I think you should explain why he kept the egg if it caused him so much trouble. Was it a feeling, or was it the dream ...

I really liked it, though you did have some grammatical problems. Like when you wrote“I don’t want to give you the same war speech we’ve ever heard.". In stead of ...