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Everyone else has done the nit pick, and since your edit, sworddance picked out the main things I noticed. I'll just say that I found the whole tree and hour ...

I don't why you keep on moaning that you're not a good writer, cos this was very well written. The way you were saying about how you aren't good made ...

Try adding in a similie or a metaphor. Like, paint a picture of your ideas on love. Is it good? Bad? A waste of time? It's nice that you put ...

I found this a bit confusing in places, but that might be because I don't know these characters. Although I've seen Aethel in the Character Answer Game. :) The few ...

Good idea. This is well written, but you have some errors with capitalization and commas. Some of your dialogue could go a bit more smoothly as well, I think. Dang! ...

I liked this a lot! What are Fin and the others, I want to know? Are you going to post more of this? Myth's dun the nitpick, so I'll just ...

Ouchie, well done on writing the beating scene - it made my insides go all funny. *squirms* Anyway, I didn't read all of this, just the, erm, juicy bit, sorry. ...

Darn, Ortega is so :evil: Great as ever, JC! :D Once again she answered, “yes.” Capitalize "yes". She sat with Tammy at their table, emotionally and physically drained , and ...

This was very good! Your style of writing is very easy to read, and the way you put Mohammed's last thoughts down was very effective. The thoughts of the terrorists ...

Hm, good! I like the way you don't make Alexandria out to be perfect; she feels jealous over her sister's fame and all. When's there going to be more of ...

O-h, the foreshadowing! *Jaws theme tune starts playing* Nah, this was good, but you still need to leave a line between dialogue. You forget to do this with one part. ...

I liked this a lot! And I mean, a lot! Your style of writing flows nicely, and I like writing that is thoughtful, like this. And like JCobsessed's POD (check ...

Yeah I think what Dusky said summs it up, really. It was very good, and well written, but what was the pain at the end? And here: The boy’s name ...

Oh very good! :D And I DO like the idea of a "negative view point." "I don’t care!” answered Sherman, glaring around. “How do I see normally again?!” The Geezer ...

I like this! :D That thing about your characters beng so real, and made up of different parts of your own character is really good, and it's something that all ...