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Hai! I like your title, and I love anything with wings and wingéd things in it. XD This is very short, and as such, I feel there needs to be ...

Hai! Sorry I wasn’t able to get this sooner; I had work and then the new trailer for Sherlock Holmes: Game of Shadows came out... Anyway! You mentioned about getting ...

O hai. :mrgreen: It was something she saw on the streets near Sniper Alley, coupled with a dream she had that night, which led to the development of Mariana’s philosophy. ...

Hai! You said you wanted nitpicks, so I hope you don't mind if I'm harsh. :) Your title definitely drew me in because, hey, who doesn't want to read about ...

Hai! :D Bolded are the bits I have issues with. The witch , Wither, fled through the doors of the old church house. Using “fled” here made me think that ...

Hai Kylan! Whenever I see something you've written, I'm always in two minds about whether I should read it or not. If I can understand it, I feel incredibly on ...

Hai Perse! Well, you should definitely write more prose, cos this was very good indeed. I like the tone of gentle melancholy and your narrative styled flowed extremely well; very ...

Hai! The prompt's kind of an obvious one, so there wasn't so much that you could do with it except take it literally, I guess. :mrgreen: This was cute and ...

Hai! I like your title; it's very fairy-tale, like The Princess and the Pea kind of thing, and I was intrigued enough by the first paragraph to leave my episode ...

Hai Hollow! Welcome to YWS! My name is Julie and I’ll be your cruise director for today. I also play air drums to Eye of the Tiger. Not as well ...

Hai! This pretty cool, and I love your synopsis/tag line thing; it's very hooky. :mrgreen: Anyway. I liked your character and her humour; you showed her thoughts and emotions and ...

Hai! This sounds like a cool contest and I hope you do well. You have a good story here; there’s just a few things that could be done better, imho. ...

Hi Elizabeth! Welcome to the site! I hope you enjoy yourself on here, and if you have any questions about anything (well, you know, site-wise, I’m a little rusty on ...

Hai! First off, I very much agree with GryphonFledgling about italics and viewpoints cos reading this the first time round was confusing... I needed to reread some parts to get ...

I'd love to be able to crit this properly but I haven't heard this song and I feel if I do listen to it, I'll loose a little unique part ...