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Re: Fog - Part 8/10
No one knew what to say, the truckers found themselves back on a seat and Joe stood close to the door holding the shotgun like a sentry or a prison ...
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Re: Fog - Part 7/10
“There, someone’s out there!” T he boy of the couple said and we all followed his finger. Should be a small letter on “the” and “the boy of the couple” ...
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Re: Fog - Part 6/10
Hello! I had to hold Janey. We had two bodies... These two facts sound oddly connected. There was a way about how he eyed her, how his hand’s moved along ...
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Re: Fog - Part 5/10
Hello again! I looked back into the cubicle at his face. He was dead, not dying. The blood had seeped most of the way from his wrists to the door. ...
Sep 16, 2011 -
Re: Hadrian's Wall: Legio VI Ferrata
Hi! Just letting you know that I upped the rating on this to an 18+ as you had a lot of strong swearing here. It's always best to rate too ...
Sep 16, 2011 -
Re: Fog - Part 4/10
yo! “They’re birds . ” T he boy with the leather jacket said. “I can see them when they hit, they look like magpies, but magpies don’t flock, I don’t ...
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Re: Fog - Part 3/10
He offered me big money, I would have taken it, if Tara wasn’t ready-to-pop pregnant . This is a very crude image, and from what I’ve seen of Ross, it ...
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Re: Fog - Part 2/10
Yello! “I tell you one winter morning it didn’t get light until lunch time, and ‘dem Eskimos, sometimes they don’t see light for months . ” T he biggest one ...
Sep 14, 2011 -
Re: Fog - Part 1/10
Hey Joshua! This is definitely the best thing of yours I read so far--it flows a lot easier than Thirty-One Days. ^_^ It did have a few wrinkles, but you've ...
Sep 14, 2011 -
Re: Softness of Doves
Hi Amelia! Side note before I begin: you accidentally posted this chapter twice, so I deleted the unliked chapter for you. ^_^ A filthy shovel was slung at my feet. ...
Sep 14, 2011 -
Re: Lolzombies Prologue
Hello! The bane of all grammar, the text. I'm not sure that this makes sense, like the two ends tying together. I'm not sure that texts are the bane of ...
Sep 13, 2011 -
Re: Dead End
Hey Ranger! I love zombies. ^_^ XD A tooth just fell out of my mouth. I didn’t feel it, just saw it on the ground, found a gap in my ...
Sep 6, 2011 -
Re: Chapter 1 - The Road Less Travelled
Hello! As soon as I had finished reading English at Cambridge, I knew I wanted to do something different. On a first reading I didn’t really like this as an ...
Sep 6, 2011 -
Re: Torture Scene
Hello! The back of his skull throbbed like a whore's heart Not sure why a whore’s heart? Traditionally the consensus seems to be that whores don’t have hearts. A steady ...
Sep 5, 2011 -
Re: The Eolaithe
Hello! The Eolaithe (EE - OH - LAY - TH) is a Science Fantasy novel. Set In the future after the War Of Peace that sent the world back to ...
Sep 3, 2011
