TrumanSBooth

Very good. Very interesting. I have only one correction which I'll get out of the way, and then go on to praise. In the first stanza, you spelled "lightning" as ...

Very good. Perfect grammar, interesting rhyme scheme. I had trouble with the meter at first, but as it went along I really liked it. An interesting story, too... I didn't ...

As has been noted, your opening sentence was killer. Brilliant, genius, whatever you want to call it... I loved it. However, I agree that "day" should be changed. Not quite ...