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Although I like the content of the poem, I feel it do with being less fragmented at some points, perhaps to give it more structure. It feels rather randomly thrown ...

Hi Lil_Pau, and a happy new year to you too. I think I'd best start by addressing the length, and overall nature of the poem. This feels like an excerpt ...

Hey Vern. This piece had quite a Larkin-esque feel to it, and although the grammar and use of punctuation is by no means perfect, overall I like the moral messages ...