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Re: "The flame"- draft
Timmyjake here to write you a short review! Ok. This is really good, but the paragraphs need to be much shorter. Think of a paragraph as an idea. Like an ...
Dec 18, 2013 -
Re: A Partridge and a Pear (Part 1 of The Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Timmyjake here to write you a short review! I wouldn't change anything in this story really. A few things just don't click, but that's alright. Mainly I just thought it ...
Dec 17, 2013 -
Re: The Monster Drags
Timmyjake here to leave you a short review! So this is great. Your descriptions are vivid and I don't even need to use my imagination to picture what the monster ...
Dec 17, 2013 -
Re: Joseph Hallick Sells Top Quality Automobiles
Timmyjake to leave you a short review... Ok, I find this really weird. Is this for real? Are you really advertising for a company in England? Or are you just ...
Dec 16, 2013 -
Re: The Rising Dawn
Timmyjake to leave you a short review! I'll get right down to nitpicking. ;) Aeron was truly the last man to stand with cadavers lying behind. That sentence I think ...
Dec 16, 2013 -
Re: This is My Boy's Story
Timmyjake to leave you a short review! Ok, I really like your writing style, but one thing confused me at first. You start it like you are telling it "Richard ...
Dec 15, 2013 -
Re: Humans, we are a gift and a curse
Timmyjake to leave you a short review! First of all, I just want to tell you that I agree that humans can be a plague to the earth. Not in ...
Dec 15, 2013 -
Re: Snow: The Tale of a Cold Heart (Part V)
Timmyjake here to give you a review. I am truly dumbfounded. This is just as good or better than most of the New York bestsellers I have written. You have ...
Dec 13, 2013 -
Re: me........and writing
Timmyjake to give you a short review! I have never been talented with lyrics or the flow of poetry, so I fail at reviewing poetry and lyrics when I look ...
Dec 11, 2013 -
Re: Shut Down
Timmyjake here to give you a review! *salutes* At your service! Ok, so this is a really cool idea. Giants come. They have no idea that they were crushing innocent ...
Dec 11, 2013 -
Re: Eye of the Slayer- Chapters 2-4
Timmyjake here to give you a short review!! So I love your story line. How it flows and how you brought me into your story immediately, showing me your characters ...
Dec 9, 2013 -
Re: People and Paper
Timmyjae here to write a short review on a short story! Firstly, I want to say that your descriptions are very colorful and well... descriptive! One sentence isn't a sentence. ...
Dec 8, 2013 -
Re: Partly
Timmyjake here to give you a short review! *Yawns* Its time to go to sleep... I have to say this whole thing is sooo funny! She is so unprofessional and ...
Dec 5, 2013 -
Re: Do you know that feeling?
Timmyjake here to give you a review as best I can... This is difficult to give a review on. It seems like it was written from the heart. Wonderfully descriptive, ...
Dec 5, 2013 -
Re: The Limit of Love <Chapter 3>
Timmyjake here to give you a short review. First, what a nightmare! Your character is in danger all the time! Full of suspense! I was kept on the edge of ...
Dec 5, 2013