Tigersprite

It's confusing enough that I wanted to read it through. As PadrePio pointed out, you need to put in some more commas to make the story seem more natural. But ...

This story is rather interesting. The language is sort of old, but it only adds to the story. One mistake I noticed though: Even skipper spared him a good clouting ...

This is the result of bored writing. With this pen I can craft. I can construct a marvelous mountain that reaches to the sky with snow capping the peak. I ...

Nice, short and simple story. It reminds me of something I read in a short story anthology somewhere. It weighed down my finger, a constant reminder of who I should ...

I did love you And I still do But you turned away While I called out to you I think 'When' would have been better for emphasis than 'while'. Baby ...

A pretty decent poem, if I read it correctly, about a soldier who prays that they don't die on the battlefield, but who dies anyway, and the narrator feels that ...

There is nothing but truth in this, and I can easily recognize many of things in it. But let me help you with a few mistakes. This is what the ...

Beautiful. Although: Even these small temporary g moments of joy grow old and unsatisfying beyond the grasp of surprise. I think the 'g' there was a mistake. But this brief ...

Elizabeth Love layed on her bed looking up at her ceiling thinking about how crappy her life had gotten in the past 9 years, it had all started on her ...

Beautiful. I found it difficult to understand at first, and I wasn't too sure about it, but the more I read the better it was. It’s a lie. What’s a ...

So...Topaz and Emerald are talking, winged werewolves? I am a notice writer so I probably have quite a few grammar mistakes that I didn't see. This is the most romantic ...

This is the kind of poem that I don't understand. I got a general vibe of sadness, anger and pain (and of course loneliness), and it seems really emotional. From ...

First of all, you need to remember to leave space after a full stop and comma. Your writing was kind of all bunched together because of that. That day when ...

As TheTruthLiesWithin pointed out, this should be a Prologue, not a Prolougue. And: My leg stung as a particularly nasty barbed branch tore the flesh of my calf. The 'of' ...

I really like this poem, it's got a lot of feeling and emotions to it. And yet it's so short and simple. The only thing I have a little problem ...