Tiarasandnarwhals

Thanks for your advise! Think that those tweaks would make it a lot better. -tiarasandnarwhals

Thanks for your comment! I completely agree, who wouldn't love the rain. Reading back I feel like removing the 'the' in the first would make it sound smoother so thanks. ...

Thank you! I think that you're point is valid but I wanted this poem to flow in one long part like the rain! -the poet