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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Broken Heart

    This kind of reminded me of the famous 'Ten Things I Hate about You' poem. Short and sweet. It's the kind of poem where a lot of people, even if ...

    Oct 25, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Open Up

    Hi, my main advice in this is just that you should probably try to make things just a little more simple and cut down on sentences or break them up ...

    Mar 9, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Blithe Bereavement - Prologue

    Really really good! It completely drew me in- and I find it hard to get pulled into stories on the internet to read them through so it must be good. ...

    Sep 17, 2008
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Wind that Carries Me

    Well, I think all the corrections have already been pointed out so I will do some encouraging! I fall in love with the wind. Absolutely loved in. Since we don't ...

    Sep 14, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: life and all its random glory chapter 1

    I really like the beginning. (Like everyone else has said, but it's true.) I think it foreshadows more than just the obvious of a body conscious person but also the ...

    Sep 10, 2008
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Twilight Fan Fiction

    Suddenly, with a soft groan, Edward lifted me up off him and so softly pushed me, so I was lying on my back . Edward put his lips to my ...

    Sep 7, 2008
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Death of a hero

    He was dying and he embraced his death like a long lost friend. That one sentence really hit me. Death isn't usually something people embrace, usually something that people shy ...

    Sep 7, 2008


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— W. Edwards Deming