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This was really good and well written. There was one small thing that I noticed that looked a little awkward though: Emma adds, whacking me on the butt. My skirt ...

I loved the story, let's just start with that. It was innovative, which is something I always like to see. There isn't much I can say criticism wise because the ...

This opening is very intriguing and I like the idea that it is actually written by the main character. That is something I personally enjoy doing in my own writing. ...

This is a very interesting story! Well written and very detailed without it feeling like it was too much. You created a real living world, and that is very nice ...

First off, I must say that I did enjoy the script and it shows that you obviously know how to format it for actors and directors. While we are on ...

Very interesting story! I was captivated straight from the beginning! One thing I should mention is right at the end. Where you said something to the effect of Rachel driving ...

Though I obviously don't get the sobe joke, I don't mind that it's in there. It doesn't seem out of place to me at all. As for the entire chapter, ...

Okay, I see a lot of comments about a Percy Jackson feel and I don't disagree, but I get the feeling that it may only be an inspiration and the ...

Okay, again great job on this one! I thouroughly enjoyed the entire thing. That being said, the spacing in between lines for the first, I don't know, paragraph (?) was ...

Hey there, let me start off by saying that the story is very interesting to read and I feel like the characters are believable which is the main thing I ...

Ummm. Wow. This story is impossible to really review using conventional methods. There are words that don't exist, unrealistic dialogue and the story jumps like crazy with no reason for ...

I'll start off by saying that the script was interesting and easy to read, but that being said, here are my thoughts: // VIOLET : Shut up! That bolded line ...

Let me start off by saying that the script was really good! There is one little nit-pick that I have, but this is more in the formatting and possibly because ...