TheEvilWithin

Thank you for this review. You're so right, especially with what you said about my punctuation. I always play it safe and end up with way too many short "tense" ...

Thanks :D I'll try to post my chapters in sections from now on. Thanks a lot for reading / reviewing

Thanks for the review. Truth be told, I mostly enjoyed the explanation you gave about the things you know about pokemon. Hilarious ^^

That's to be expected with first drafts. It's tricky to see what works and what doesn't unless you share the early versions and get feedback. The only reason I put ...

Thank you so much. I agree with your idea about describing the growlithe, for sure. As for the commas, you've inspired me to read up on the correct placement of ...

You're very welcome. I'm eager to read more so do message me! Thanks

I wont lie, of course it was a boy. It's obvious when you think about it, because he says "hanging out" and doesn't seem like a girl (well he clearly ...

Thanks Yuri, I found your comments most helpful. I'm going to rework it so it isn't so tell-y. Not too much, mind. I think that because it's so basic, it ...

Thanks Angel, I found your comments most helpful, and I will use them when I go back to edit. In the future I will try to be more consistent when ...

Thanks for your great review, it helped a lot! I want to talk to you about why I didn't give any information concerning Darren's and Jase's back stories. I have ...

Hello ^_^ Any criticism is much appreciated! Evil _____ Chapter One (four years later) The loud buzz jolted Darren awake. He sat up in alarm, his ears pricked and the ...

It was very thought-provoking, but the overuse of the word colors lessened my enjoyment somewhat. Anyway, nice poem. Evil

I drastically changed the prologue so that I could incorporate your ideas into it. Thanks for your help, and let me know if this one sucks too. xD That's if ...

I like the hair thing, it's really interesting. I want to know why he killed that girl's sister. Also, there were a lot of mistakes, but not enough for me ...