TheEccentricScribe

I like what you say in the poem. In some places, even how you say it is neat. But as some have said, you may want to relax on the ...

I don't agree with the above comment that it's the writer's job entirely when creating effective work. Personally, I think good literature is not the writer dumping his or her ...

Excellent poem, Emeraldi, quite full of feeling, very touching and very convincing. Two things. Imperative just seems like too . . . Eh, formal of a word, though that's not ...

This reminded me (in a rather scary way) of the kind of conversation I might have with my father. It also reminds me of the Abbet & Castello "Who's on ...

From the first, I was hooked to this little story. I was just glancing over different stuff, not really planning on reading everything through, and this grabbed my curiosity. Really ...

Not terribly innovative at the moment, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. After all, that's why so many people inspired by The Lord of the Rings (or any other ...

A weakness I have as a writer is trying to get way too much out in the first swing. You do not have that weakness; you keep enough story elements ...

The story was entertaining and imaginative. I suggest adding some commas in dialogue where pauses might seem natural, but that's more a stylistic preference than anything else. Also, it stuck ...