TheDreamDay

I like the ending. I was kind of expecting the boy to run away or something so I was really surprised. But I didn't really understand what you mean when ...

Hey, did you ever post this on some other site? Maybe on Gaia? Cause I'm shure I've read that somewere before... I liked this piece, I loved the cliff-hanger ending. ...

I really liked this! I love you style, and the way the reader is brought inside Davids head when he answeres. Also how his thoughts kind of pop up when ...

You really brought Sara alive for me. You described her feelings well and I could get a pretty good picture of the type of person she was. Something I found ...

The first paragaph was a bit confusing, but after that the story had a nice flow to it. The only part I thought was rather rushed was when she says ...