TheCrimsonLady

Hello, love! Suffice to say that this chapter confused me. I wasn't able to keep track of all the people; too many boys :). Also, the story seemed to progress ...

All I can say is... wow. I've read published pieces that could be considered dirt next to that. And dark. And moody. And brave. I'm rambling. Sorry, love. So anyway. ...

Hello, love! First off, there's nothing I found that was grammatically incorrect. No spelling issues, either, love! However, your sentences are... rather short. I'd say describe the shoes less and ...

Hello, love! Aurora here for a review! Technicalities first, love! I feel like I’m going insane, crazy, completely and utterly mentally unstable, whatever you want to call it. I feel ...

Hello love! Back for another review! Technicalities first, eh? The fact remains, those daggers hidden beneath the cloak make her far from such. The fact remains, though, those daggers hidden ...

Hello love! I like the way the plot is going. With a bit o' editing, you'll have your readers soon hooked! I don't really know what's wrong with your writing ...

OH. MY. GOD! You just can't. End. There. Please!!! Very good, love! I absolutely loved the whole thing! Good for you, writing in first person! I liked the entire story ...

Hello love! I absolutely ADORE your use of imagery in this piece. I could see what you were saying as you said it. You have a gift there :). A ...

Ah. Offensive material. How do I love it. I haven't read any of the previous chapters, but I really liked this one! I was a bit confused; does he want ...

May I just say; this make much more sense. Your paragraphs are still a bit chunky, so it'd be better if you cleared that up. You're also missing a lot ...

I am very very very very very very confused. Like... very! I know that most prologues are vague and nondescript, but I'd like to be able to read it. (I'm ...

This is an amazing short story! I couldn't stop reading it! So, you described Kyle's feelings so well, I could have sworn that you copied this from someone who actually ...

Hello, love! I'd just like to say that you could definitely go somewhere with this. You have a lot of grammar and spelling errors, but since you said you got ...

Hello love! While not actually being british, most of my friends are, for some weird reason! I read all of the chapters in an hour. You drew me into your ...

Hello, love! I adore the plot in your book! You have a few grammar errors, though, so I'll just point them out to you, shall I? “No, not really. I ...