TheAceofAll

Hi I'm sorry I couldn't review your piece earlier but my computer got a virus and it was a whole big mess. Anyway I am here now and ready to ...

Hi, I'm sorry I couldn't review sooner but my computer got a virus and then I got grounded ; it was a hole big mess. Anyway, I'm here now and ...

Hi, I'm sorry I couldn't review sooner but my computer got a virus and then I got grounded ; it was a hole big mess. Anyway, I'm here now and ...

Hey I am so sorry that it toke me so long to review. My computer got a virus and it was a whole big mess but I'm here now so ...

Hey, sorry it toke me so long but here is my review: Small stuff "He wondered what crimes The man done." Don't think The should be capitalized. If it is ...

Hi, I will do my best to keep this short and sweet, Her hair was shaggy, falling to her shoulders, dark brown. This sentence is just a little confusing. seeming ...

First off, I want to say that this is a good introductory chapter. The use of simple sentences in your first paragraph really helped with the drama and I must ...

Hey, sorry about the wait but this summer has been particularly hectic. I don't think you need the exclaim part. it's in the presence tense and just an exclamation part ...

First off, this really grabs you but concerning your dialog, i found it hard to keep track of who said what. Also, i a few places, you forgot a " ...

How very cool with this idea. I really liked how you painted the picture of an average person and how her dreams are created. The only thing is, if you ...