ThatOneGuy2002

Amazing, now that, is what i call free style poetry. I can tell you worked hard on this, good job. Now, there is one gramatic error, if it was not ...

Wow. That is a niiiice murder story, just out of curiousity, what is the backstory to this(if such a story exists)? Also, it fits pretty well so you might not ...

Nice. I liked it overall, but there were some points that needed a little work, such as possibly adding specifics to examples, as that usually can paint an oil on ...

A nice beginning, though perhaps you should consider being more descriptive on some points, such as the intro, or possibly where natalie is waiting in the doctors room. More description ...