TNCowgirl

Thanks a million. It might be a while before I can redo it though. :'(. But you don't understand how much of a help you've all been. :D

Trust me it is just temporary, :D any suggestions, I don't know what to name it. I've never read that series, is it good? I'll get more up when I ...

Thanks for the help. I will redo this chapter before posting more. :D, I have a dog, but at the moment he is really really sick and just a puppy. ...

It can't be that bad that no one has left a comment. :'(

Not bad. I like it. Now I'm going to read the other part. You played on little towns right. But it kinda seems hard for her to run that far ...

Alright, before I add anymore, I'll be putting a revision up. First I have to write it so I might be gone for a bit. :P. Thanks for your crits ...

Alright, I'll go back and fix the introducing thing. Just wait and read the next part if you haven't already. :D

They didn't introduce themselves, she didn't figure out his name until Amber said it. Ya that makes her sound really bad, but she isn't. :D, He just knew her name ...

*cries* You must keep going though. Durn work scheadule. Oh well, if you must, but after that I suggest you work double time or I will come after you with ...

Interesting. There are a few mistakes. Some places you forgot to put stuff in quotation marks. Other you just needed to hit enter. Other then that I thought it was ...

Mattie hasn't been on for a while. I thought it was good. If I had been on when it was posted I would've replied. Twas sad only one person did ...

Now I'm confussed, your switching between tenses is weird and if I remebered correctly the person that "I" refered to was a girl in the prologe. MAybe clear that up ...

Twas very very good!!!! I liked it. You could've added a little more discription and such. Like Luke noticing her in his brothers shirt and so on. But other then ...

Whoa, that is really really sad, good, happy, and wow. I don't normally like this style of writing. But you did really well with it.

No there was no reason for that, but I couldn't seem to find it. I fixed up the letter. When I post more I'll try and remember to tell you. ...