TNCowgirl

Alright, if y'all still want to read this PM me and I'll try to get more up. But if it has died it has died. So let me know either ...

Thanks to everyone for replying, sorry I didn't say this earlier. Anyways this was written after it really happened to my best friend and I was really really mad. That ...

So is there anymore yet? Cause I'd like to read it. If I haven't posted on it just let me know. TNC

Good job. I want to read more. Post more please. Everyone caught everything I had seen, but other then that it was good. It is moving nicely and you keep ...

It was good. I'll go on and read more. But there wasn't anything I could see that needed to be fixed that isn't mentioned. There is a whole lot of ...

Wow, good job!!!!!! Keep going, please please please keep going. I'll give a better crit later. TNC

Wow, this was really good. There wasn't really anythign to put that wasn't mentioned. But good job. Can't wait to read more. By the way, your style of writing is ...

Ok, you better make it soon, well acctually I have to hit the sack. But PM me when you get it done and I'll go over it.

BETTER!!! I really liked it. Didn't find anything else to tell you to change. One thing. What does ostentatious mean??? But other then that this was really good. Keep going. ...

Um, you need to reformat. Put a empty line between every paragraph, after you do that and make it easier on the eyes I will read through it. Pm me ...

Try breaking this up in half. People will crit it because it is shorter. Tell me when you do though. All you need to do is take off half and ...

Capatilize 'I's' and in dialog it is " not '. Other then that it was ok. Oh and: Her and I. not Me and Her. The devil and the addiction. ...

Cool, twas good. Didn't really catch anything. Sorry for the short crit. I have to jet. TNC

Wow, dude. Keep going. Twas good, a few missing commas here and there. Nothing big. What's Bar? TNC

Ok, well there wasn't really anything in it that needed to be changed. It was good. Left us at a really really mean cliffhanger. I want to know what he's ...