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Re: Pinch Me Chpt. Three
Okay...umm....I am still COMPLETLEY lost. I know I probably sound like a broken record but you keep jumping from one setting and scene of the story to, it seems like, ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Pinch Me Chpt. Two
The content in this chapter is awesome! But the transition from the last chapter to this really quirks me. Also her sister seems almost bi-polar. You describe her as happy ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: Pinch Me Chpt. One
The start is really good! Your characters are really easy to get into quickly, which is sometimes hard to do, so KUDOS for that! I think it begins in a ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: The Grim-Keeper [2]
Hey! i must say, this had a sad little ending! But its not the ending! wootwoot! haha. First off I have to say, how you described your surroundings was amazing! ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: Blue ~Prologue and Chapter 1
Hey! I just read your chapter and firstly thought there is so much potential in this novella just waiting to be accessed! This was a very short chapter and it ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: The Grim-Keeper [Prologue/1]
Work with me here, I'm still a new-new person! I really liked this chapter, there is a bunch of books out there like this but this one didnt feel the ...
May 19, 2011 -
Re: Holding On To Nothing: Prologue
This has SOOO much emotion in every word, i can almost hear the anguish in her voice, amazing tone! There were a few things i didn't like, she kinda sounds ...
May 19, 2011 -
Re: Pace - 1
OH my gosh! I love this story, its exactly what my head dialogue sounds like on a daily basis. There wasnt much that i didnt like about this story, its ...
May 18, 2011 -
Re: The Almost But Not Quite Suicidal Cherry Sucker
OMJ. This was such a heart wrenching story. I liked how you didnt stray off topic when there were so many opportunity to and how you connected the title and ...
May 16, 2011 -
Re: She Knows Him
This is amazing! it sounds like shes thinking about him and then it just hits her that she cant have him! So heartbroken! The only thing i dont like is ...
May 16, 2011 -
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Hey! I'm kinda new at this so work with me here haha. So i was reading your story and one thing that bothered me a little was that you were ...
May 16, 2011
