Swires

Like many great books Orwell's style was a little draggy and fat. However the story as a piece of speculative fiction was nothing short of a masterpiece.

Ive read the first two books and simply haven't had time with all my other reading to fit in the rest of the series. I loved them though, they are ...

Thanks all. I have italics but I wasnt bothered to change them onto the forum. :) Thanks again everyone.

Thanks for the input guys - ill be sure to correct the mistakes soon. Anyone else?

She can make another few million out of an encyclopaedia though lol.

JC - Shes making an encyclopedia that will answer any loose ends.... The last line was tacky. I hated it. Although as for the epilogue I fail to see how ...

Thanks guys, Im glad you like it. MM - They are out of chronological order because they reveal tiny pieces of information gradually. If id have done them in chronological ...

Thanks for the critique. Sandley Limerick never had a scene with the Thing... that was Robert Dawson, the major shareholder of Prime and Dawson Limited? I agree, there was no ...

I imagine the story is a slow starter. When the adventure and main sequence begin, like many novels it will pick up. Its simply a matter of just going with ...

Thanks for the comment, I may return to Scall's magic some day and carve it into a Novella - 30k maybe. Clean it up and cut out a load of ...

Thank you for the insightful critique CCF. Ill take your points on board. Thankyou for your comments JCobsessed even though I do not agree that in such a short piece ...

Thank you everyone for your insightful comments. I'm so glad I have finally written a piece that isn't bin worthy.

Quite humorous if not Random. Its not Pratchett - its more of a random fairy tale than satire. Enjoyable and funny none the less.

Thankyou Hunter. I'm trying this new style and seeing where it takes me. I agree with what you have said, there does need to be more showing. It is bland ...

Thanks guys for your input. Ive edited a few of the points bian' made. Poltergiest, I really appreciate your comments. More feedback welcome.