Sweetness

The Lego bricks tumble and fall, The men, they lie beneath it all, The guilty stand. Emotion: no change, Their bullets empty from any range. Their legs don't move, they ...

I love it

I read it and enjoyed it but it wasnt an easy read, it also confuses fact and fiction was didn't really do me any good ...

i love this poem it's fantastic and well written ! Last stanza was weaker than the rest but still great job! :D

lol you're so sweet! Nah thanks its appreciated =) and thankfully i don't look like yoda too .. I hope

Yeah thank you , i'll make sure i change that. The bodies entwined lips devine bit is supposed to symbolise the physical side of always bieng together!

I'd love some comments and opinions, i think it sounds really juvenille so any improvements will be welcomed =)