SuzieCake

Okay, to start off, I didn't like how it began. I was expecting it to be a continual of the last chapter, but... I admit that I was a little ...

This was good, but I feel as if there is something missing. I can't quite place my finger on it, but it just seems like something is missing. Maybe it's ...

This was a little repetitive on the "I" and it seemed almost like a list. It also seemed like an important chapter, but you didn't go into much detail on ...

I agree with Sam. So, I'm still kind of unsure of what time frame this is. Also, in this chapter, Susannah confused me. She didn't seem to want to be ...

Okay, so I'm just now realizing that I am so behind on all of this. 2006? Really. I'm sooooooo behind. Anyway, since that's not what I'm really talking about, I'm ...

-sigh- Why can't the attachments be counted as a review? It would make my life so much easier. Haha. Kidding. Anyway, this chapter was a little short and okay. It ...

Okay, I'll admit that I thought this chapter was a little boring. But you did warn us. :roll: I still can't figure out what time era this is in, like ...

So, I am completely and totally hooked. And I really want to know what the heck is going on with Jasmine and Walter. Thanks for letting me know you posted. ...

Oh, if only it were 3:35 in the afternoon instead of morning! But, alas, I must end my reviewing for tonight. I will say, before I go, though, that I ...

I enjoyed this. When I read the prologue, I thought it wasn't going to be very interesting, but as I read chapter one, I wondered to myself, "Gosh! What was ...

I enjoyed reading this. A lot, I must say. Although, since I don't know much about the eighteenth century, I can't picture it with carriges and horses. It's all about ...

Hi, I'm SuzieCake and today, I'm reviewing your work. First off all, I would like to say that the story was amazing. The only thing you really need to work ...

The description in this chapter was better. I got a sense of what was going on. But I was really confused with her sudden change in attitude. How can someone ...

This was a little more interesting. I could actually get into this, but there still are a few things you're lacking. Emotion for one, descriptions for another. I can't get ...

Okay, so...I think I said this in the attatchment, but I reread the story since I scanned the first time. Let me just say, I envy your writing. I really ...