Supernova

Good description, interesting end, want to read on - you've ticked quite a few boxes here, my friend. I think the whole bit where she takes the wine glass from ...

That's lovely. :) I don't really know what to add, apart from, isn't it spelt 'concealed'? :) My favourite bit is where you say 'For every dream that lay in ...

I really like the idea, it's very interesting and unique. That's one key thing ticked off, now you just need to tell it and introduce great characters. We don't know ...

I think the story, on the whole, is interesting. However, there is still room for improvement. The idea that her auntie knows she is a witch is not quite the ...