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Tsk. Do you not know that 'travellers' is perfectly acceptable British?

I'm not sure whether you noticed, but you say the boy lost one sneaker. Did they wear sneakers in Frankenstein's day?

Thank you, Emma. Just for the record, Avari is male.

This doesn't sit well with me. After all, Harvest Moon has always been a family thing.

Hear, hear! I also think it helped that the olden-day presidents were working men. These days... not so much.

I'd just like to point out something. Even the most person doesn't normally write in their diary every day; maybe spacing out the days a little will make this more ...

Pendragon by D.J. MacHale is worth reading. There are ten books, I'm fairly sure, each dealing with a different territory.

Hey, I see you've written another piece. I found only one mistake. starred at his feet. This ought to be "stared".

passed all the creatures This should be "past". He took his place on the thrown "Throne" rather than "thrown" is the right word here.

When was the last time you "emitted" someone inside?

Hey, just wanted to point out a small mistake. anyones. Don't forget to use the ' here.

"At though"? Don't forget to fix this.

I have to agree with you. ...Does anyone else think maybe the flock's gonna go into space?

If you plan to continue, you should really stick to one tense.

Topaz yawned and lied down close to me. It's "lay" in this instance. Simple mistake.