Stori

Don't be mistaken, Perhaps you mean "don't get me wrong". Even though, I was about to do I'd drop the comma. It doesn't fit in the sentence. he was tryingg ...

Hey, Emmy. Just out of curiosity, have you played the original "Back to Nature"? In the first sentence, "lied" ought to be "lay." If the mayor had said something untruthful, ...

If you like stories about animals, I can name a few. Redwall series by Brian Jacques Watership Down by Richard Adams Warriors by Erin Hunter. (Actually it's a pen name; ...

Good to see you again, Cat. [He stared ahead, his gnarled fingers drummed an impatient beat on the steering wheel. I think you may need to edit. Either change "drummed" ...

Stori here to offer assitance. Right off the bat I could see you have a problem with run-ons. Trying readind this out loud and you'll see what I mean. now ...

Hello Purple, I thought I'd help you out. grandfathers Don't forget to add an apostrophe to possessives. It looks like this: ' ‘Stupid old man.’ He thought The usual way ...

Perhaps I can be of some help. where doing there every day routine; In this case the proper spelling is "were" and "their." It's an easy mistake, so don't be ...

This leaves me wanting more. Is there any? Most of all, he was tired of it beating him at Chess. Very amusing. He had been stuck on his ship now ...

There were fewer bamboo trees here, lesser leaves Perhaps "fewer leaves" would sound better? Without the wind, some bamboo managed to creak and groan, It's just me, but I think ...

Hello Ready- I shall point out a few errors. There wasn't no snow "There was no snow" or "There wasn't any" should go here. asking her what she had promised ...

Hey, I just thought I would point out some errors. I gave her a small,, Where'd that second comma coem from? But most of the time she pretended like I ...

Her eyes shined The past tense of "shine" is "shone". Coming to a halt, fragile look hands I think what you meant here was "fragile-looking" hands. It isn't a glaring ...

Hi Mirror, I just thought I'd point out a couple small errors. those lovely girl’s shoes. If it's more than one girl, the ' goes after the s: girls' shoes. ...

Hi there, Dark. Something I'd like to point out: a lot of the narration here sounds like Jake. For instance, I hadn’t meant to be bad, but I guess that’s ...

so I’m off to have my hamburger and my box of chips and ketchup Usually people don't list what they're having for lunch. If you want to say what she's ...