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Well, EN, it seems you may need to working on your showing. What I mean is, instead of just handing information to the reader, you can be more creative about ...

Right away one notices that this piece suffers from a lack of details. For example- She is my only friend I can talk to in the OH. Do the other ...

Seeing how everything else is covered, I just wanted to point this out. His white cheeks blossomed pink as he realized that he’d just admitted to spying. This sentence is ...

Then he who seemed the most powerful of all of them kneeled on one knee next to me and spoke. The past tense of 'kneel' is actually 'knelt'. His voice ...

Hey there, Guy. Before I point out any mistakes, remember- each time someone new speaks, it helps to start a new paragraph. For instance- I am so sorry I failed ...

In a clearing was a small, stone chapel. The building was a small affair with a steeple and empty glass windows. The inside of the chapel was small, looked to ...

The trees were bending back in forth, the owl’s whistled spookily. Not a gigantic error, but it should be 'back and forth.' Also, that apostrophe isn't needed here. where rule ...

Greetings, Catlover. I wanted to point out two places where you left out a space- Thank you, StarClan!Glowing Nettleleaf added,at least they know Also, would Owlstar bring that many warriors ...

She didn’t say it out loud, but I was nearly 100 percent sure that my mother was not happy with me. It was either that, or the waiter had put ...

Hello there, Hermes. I noticed right away that you have trouble with tenses, so let's have at it. Her parents were gone for three days. She gets out of her ...

I'll just get right into the review. This promises to be an interesting read. “Step away from the edge young man. I don’t want anyone to get hurt. If you ...

Hello there. I sat in my room listening to the sound of the dryer fan vibrating underneath my bed mixed with the bursting music coming from my laptop. This is ...

All art narrates a story about some aspect of our existence. But the existence of each individual is unique — it’s subjective. And hence art is subjective — it’s not ...

Hello. someones life that will be life changing. There are two problems with this phrase. Firstly, "someone's" should have an apostrophe. (No wonder people just use the mark...) Secondly, repeating ...

A bit of detail here might do wonders- things like the ship's name or the time of day. dress that reflect the light I'm fairly sure this ought to be ...