Stori

I also read it in class and found it to be a solid book. Lois Lowry knows a lot about human nature. You said not to give anything away, so ...

I read most of it. 'Twas very good if I do say so myself. The main character, Catherine, has an autistic brother. Which means she doesn't get along well in ...

Hey Snoink! You'll be glad to know I read the whole post. Ok, instead of quoting the passage directly, I'll just point some things out. First of all. When you ...

Hello Bugwhisker! I found it kind of amusing that in the fox fight, you had Eagle run "a few fox lengths." Other people may not spot that, but it's good. ...

*laughs* That was poetry, as Pippin once said! There are just a few nitpicks. 20mnutes gone 20 minutes. And if it's the beginning of a sentence, you usually write out ...

First reply! Ok, the thing I noticed right away: In the beginning of the chapter you slipped into third person. Shanna turned to explain but her father narrowed his eyes ...

Well, for one thing the section about each person should be longer. I personally work a lot with multiple perspectives. And about the telling and showing. 'Showing' uses more specific ...

I want to add something. Any of the Airborn trilogy (Airborn, Skybreaker and Sunclimber) by Kenneth Oppel. I haven't read the third yet, but Airborn is a great work of ...

*puts on critiquing spectacles* Hmm. The only thing I can compare this to is a story I read on another site-- cannot remember its title. It doesn't matter. This whole ...

Hey there. 'Tis Stori. I don't have much to say about this. You haven't given me enough to go on. That being said, in the prolog Lyra shifted into a ...

Just a little tip there: some readers aren't likely to be drawn in if your story begins at school. Why? Because there are hundreds of school stories out there, most ...

I don't know why, but this reminds me of "The Highwayman" by Alfred Noyes. The rhythm isn't quite the same but could be edited to fit. When a girl once ...

Kari started at the offer, Semicolon. “Hurry.” She repeated. Always, always end the dialog with a comma, like this: "Hurry," she repeated. 27,” Lorna said Spell numbers out if they ...

Where to begin... This was a very well-written piece. I didn't find any grammatical errors, so let's concentrate on the writing itself. First. The car swerves down the tiny, winding ...

Rodman Philbrick. Anything by him. Right now I'm finishing The Mighty for the second time. 'Tis awesome. Hm... anything else. Well, if you like Star Wars, try Millennium Falcon or ...