SteppenwolfDeSade

This was a really good story, and enjoyable to read. The plot was interesting and I certainly didn't lose interest as i went on, which is important. You seemed to ...

This is a great piece of work which uses dialogue really well to create characters, as well as to make the story more engaging. I certainly didn't lose interest. However, ...

Hello, interesting concept for a story, here are my critiques: 1) Why is there a random use of italics near the beginning, and why is some dialogue in italics and ...

An engaging first part to what i suspect will be an imaginative and engaging tale, you portray a completely foreign unknown land, culture and set of characters with clarity and ...

At first I wasn't really grasping what was supposed to be conveyed, however, after rereading a second and third time it's a beautiful piece of poetry, one particular line stood ...

Hey StupidSoup, Firstly, I really enjoyed the theme of time and continuity through the use of the shift between night and day, the seasons and generations of family. Also, some ...