Starlight9

Wow, this is marvelous. I am quite shocked by the end, and felt sad and pitiful for the old man. The story is great and your imagination is even greater! ...

I might consider that one of the best short-stories I have ever read here on YWS. The idea itself was tragic but still it won't stop the reader from getting ...

“ Ya it’s almost over. Today I’ll check for defects and let you know by tomorrow Shiva ,” I replied. “That’s cool ,” he said smiling at me. That was ...

Fantastic! I loved the story and what I loved more about it is your ability to give out descriptions well fitting to every scene in your story. That one for ...

Hey there, Lakshmi. Your story is very touching and what's lovely about it that it is based on a true story. It just gives hope to every person that true ...

Reviewing for chapter 3 And I actually manage d to find some of the guys Rose kept pointing hot. And this is a big deal for me because since I ...

Reviewing chapter two Rose was pointing out shirts to me sometimes (comma) but I refused them all. I finally found a cute and pair of short shorts that I hadn't ...

Some punctuation and grammar errors I've spotted: Going down the stairs, to the kitchen to take my breakfast > The comma won't be necessarily placed here, so you can say ...

A few errors I have found: I'm sat on the kitchen > "''m" should be omitted. 'You have done enough of that already .' She muttered underneath her breath as ...

"Alicia, whats wrong?" asked Adriana, her teacher , she walked closer to her, knowing she might not want to blurt it out to the whole class. > instead of repeating ...

Ivy had rolled her eyes and went to her room, drawing her parent s' hesitant faces, "You came. I didn't know whether you had gotten my e - mail or ...

Hey there, Priceless. I believe that would count as a third review for your works. But I won't complain, I really enjoy reading them : ) His eyes widened , ...

Hey there Jalmoc, I'm going to start reviewing by spotting the errors than I'd give my opinion later. Note: There might be some parts of my review said by the ...

Hi there, beccalicious94! I have read your short story and I loved it. However, my review might not seem helpful because I don't know much about flash fiction. Just one ...

Hey Priceless, I am going to start reviewing by spotting the grammatical and punctuational errors His eyes were stone cold, so cold. “I had to do it.” > no need ...