Spitfire

All righty then. Your story really got me hooked. I like the way you described the scenery, making us wonder about it, intriguing us. The way everything came to be ...

First one to reply, yay!... So the story is definitely gruesome, not something fun to read about, but somewhat realistic. You hear a lot about stuff like this happening, unfortunately. ...

Haha I love the part where Dreico punishes the raper-guy! If he really existed, you go! Getting serious though, I really like the chapter. Although, as Evi said, this sentence ...

Okay then, so here I go. Like Leza said, it might be a good idea to separate the story into a bit more of paragraphs, 'cause it might seem really ...

Oh wow, this prologue was good! When I started reading I thought it might be a really long and complicated story, but it was easily understandable really. I like the ...

So hey there Durriedog! I have to say, the story seems real interesting. You describe the scenery well, easy for people to imagine. The only thing though is I don't ...

OOh, this is good. It seems like the kind of thing I'd see in a bookstore and would make me want to buy the book. The way you described it, ...

Ha! Really good story! It's started out a bit confusing, but got more and more interesting the further I read on... I love the characters. The main character is easy ...

Totally agree with David on the mirror part, it was really missing that part in the original version. So on behalf of another who has read the original, this one ...

This is really good. You really got me hooked on the story, wondering what's going to happen next! It's a simple enough beginning, easy to get into, even with little ...