SpiritedWolfe

Thank you so, so much for this review ^^ It's very helpful, thank you!

I had a world archery tournament the weekend this was due, which is why it was rushed. I also believe it was Review Day Weekend too. ._. Also, the ending ...

Thanks so much for the review! The point of this was basically to confuse the hell out of the reader xD Lack of descriptions of the setting and characters was ...

I recommend rereading the part of when Sam supposedly "calmed down" >:3 But yeah, I can definitely see how it seems rushed, as it was a spur of the moment ...

Thanks so much! But, since you have no background, your assumptions are not correct xD Kyle is in a lot of pain because he was just stabbed in the gut. ...

By saying "I thought you walked" was Luke saying "I thought you walked to school" which was confusing to Luke because they were in the parking lot :3 Thanks for ...

I've never read the series Mortal Instruments, so this idea is completely original ~ Thank you so much! ^^

I'm still playing around with Jenn, so she's the weird one. Can I reassure you that she wasn't utterly offended (except for the mood swing part -- that's a totally ...

I normally write in present tense, so I apologize for the tense slips xD When I get into a piece, I switch without realizing it :3 thanks for pointing those ...

"...would Kyle recognize someone else from the real world if they were in the Void with him?" :333 And tap out is more so a... Something term? I don't really ...

Thanks for the review! And there is indeed a rewrite, which is the version that I am currently using :3

Thanks so much! Yeah, NaPo poetry is always so rough xD Your points are all very helpful ~ Thanks again!

POMP. YOU IDEA THIEF ;-; (for totally making fun of a trend, though, this is wonderful xD)

Thank you so much! ^^ One thing though that made this particular visit especially painful with Kyle, though, is that he's experiment that wonderful pain of being stabbed :3 It's ...