SpiritedWolfe

I think I meant Marrian's look gave her thoughts away, as in her expression was easy to read, not literally reading her mind. You know, how someone can tell that ...

The last sentence wasn't supposed to be a cliffhanger ;) 2.1 and 2.2 are all in one chapter. (Hence why they are both two) I just needed a place to ...

Just a helpful tip- if you want some really thorough, and helpful reviews, you should post chapter by chapter. Or, if you want the entire novel reviewed as a whole, ...

Answer I have an answer. You can't punch me in the face. That'd be mean. 'Welcome ^^

At lot of things you pointed out were intentional, such as in stanza for. 'to this room' is written there to hook the two stanzas together. 'gives more impurity/to this ...

Rereading through your review, I do realize that there must have been some misinterpretation. I must not have presented well enough that the crack was caused while they were on ...

Thank you so much! ^^ Your critique is really helpful and I do agree that I could be a lot less wordy. I struggle with that at times. I'll use ...

Haha, yeah. I was rather tired when I first replied and didn't notice you had picked that out (also didnt read it thoroughly and someone was confused before, but yeah.) ...

Ah, but there are some people who review one part and drop it, then not understanding the context. But it doesn't help get across the point of the chapter very ...

Syrin is magic. Hard to know when you jump in this far back. But it comes to a point when you use too much (or you go through shock) that ...

That was worded weirdly: I meant, this chapter wasn't one of the greatest, but your review was helpful and I appreciate you taking the time to make it!

Thanks for pointing out the mistakes! Yeah, I was rather tired and overall done with this chapter xD Not one of the greatest, but I appreciate the review.

You were writing it as I started spamming you xDD And thanks! It just felt too rushed for me and meh. I've done better. (Oh, and you'll just have to ...

Thanks. (I did write it in five minutes).

I work on them together and post them in parts. They are one chapter.