SpencerNolanRivers

Thanks, for all the critiques. I would edit and revise this, but I'm really can't find the state of mind to write well for the last couple of weeks. I ...

This story was written very well, though I think you need to add much more details about both Carter and Adam (indivisually) so it bring more emotional feeling whenever the ...

I find this story really disturbing, but really good. It's so different from the usual stories I would read, or other people would write. I really want to read more.

There's several grammar mistakes, but I'm too lazy to point them out. Overall, I like the story, it's all right. I think you should describe the settings and the other ...

Thanks for all of the reviews. I took them and revised the story again. I hope you all think it's a lot better.

I think the story was more in depth with Raven/Elizabeth being abused by her step-dad and having a drunken mother than her and Eric.

I'm sure this poem would sound fantastic read outloud witch such great rhyming and stuff. I didn't quite understand it though, but that could be because I don't get most ...

Yeah, it is pretty short. It only came up to three pages on paper, but hey, that make it quicker to type!

I enjoyed this one a lot better than the prologue. The descriptions are very vivid, and I cannot wait for the next chapter, but here's a question: Why did Emma ...

This was supposed to be a short story. Maybe I'll continue it, maybe not. I haven't really decided yet.

Yeah. Scott is Carah's boyfriend, and they end up breaking up at the end of the story. Thank you for the critiques, I will fix them later.

Oh, okay. I'll try re-reading and revising it the best I can.

...means to make you mean PRELUDE? Yes. [/quote]you probably need to re-read this and have a little alter...perhaps do that and then I'll come back...if i carry on now i ...

even the most successful and prolific writers now do, so who am I to argue? I know Stephanie Meyers does and it irks me to shreds! Lol...I did it because ...

Wow, that was really good. I don't see a lot of errors that need to be fixed besides the one's you've already corrected when you revised the story. Over all, ...